by put the [boom boom] into my heart Jul 3, 2006
category :
Nature, environment /
nature
Some days |
Jeez...miss Ariana has some JELOUSY issues...just cuz she knows she'll never compare...so how about instead of changing her ending, Ariana, how about you change your FACE...ooohhh what now!!! Losernipple Numbbutt is OUT! lol i love you Cayti. xo |
Yeah...wutever to the LAST comment...amazing as always cayti!! lol luv ya!! |
by Ariana
This was an interesting piece, you write about a familiar subject but in a different way, making it sound new. I'd recommend changing the ending a bit because it doesn't sound finished - instead the last line sounds as if it is halfway through an idea. Apart from that though I enjoyed this poem - well done :) |