I really like that poem. It is very well written. Keep up the good work.

It's a really sweet poem, though I feel that there is room for improvement on this one as well. The idea is well stated and clear. Your voice is tender and calm and it eased my heart.

All I can critique is that the flow needs some attention aside from that I liked it.

For instance this line:

"and it would never back as it go,"

It sounds strange to me..