by ♥ღ alwayz... forgotten ღ♥ Jul 5, 2006
category :
Sadness, depression /
lost relationships
Feel the pain I'm feeling |
Far more info packed into the short lines and stanzas. If you care there's some spelling errors that kinda messed with the flow like "see you face" where you should be your to give it a better flow. And then there's "i had to from" which has a word missing between the 'to' and 'from'. Okay tons of info in a short piece that was really quite cool for what it contained. |
by Natalie
Aw, That was sad. I thought it was really good though. In three short stanza's you expressed alot. I really liked the ending. It was great! Keep it up! 5/5 |