Hey hunni... this is really well done...
i think its really beautiful... fanku for the comment you gave me, ur a sweeti

kisses n cuddles

[xxx] leah [xxx]

This was a great write! You expressed yourself very originally in this poem.
I like the way it was structed and the flow was uniterrupted.
The rhymes you used were not the standard ones you see in most end rhyme poems...very well written and the most enjoyable read. I could really relate as well!!

"Crying and asking for some affection."
you want to end with a question mark
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Good job on getting first natalie. I liked how well the rhymes worked into the story, and how the first stanza was refrained at the end. The last line was well done also, though I sort of guessed it all along. Good poem.

Omg! wat a gr8 poem, it brings a tear to my eye 5/5 well done!

Really really good. I wasn't going to comment cos you've got so many good comments already and they all say what I want to say- great work, great rhyming and an ace poem that I could really relate to. I loved this, it brought back all my bad memories though, but that's because it's so good and i can relate.
plz check out my poems :) fanx
xxxBETHxxx

No wonder you got 1st. well done! really moved me. Love you to comment on mine.

Beautiful job as usual. ^-^

Great poem the flow was really good! It was awesome no critisism needed!

Please r/r/c rose colored glasses, and foriegner. thanks
-ann

Gave me chills. =/

really good, Nat.

just worries me... hun, if you need to talk, I'M HERE. all the time. just email me if i'm not online and i'll respond as SOON as possible. k?

sometimes you need to talk to someone about how you're feeling. so they can relate/comfort you so you don't feel so alone. ya know?

...or am i just making a complete fool of myself?

eh. anyways.

i love you to pieces, Nat.

keep your head up. and keep writing. your work is amazing. and you keep getting better and better.

i. am. envious.

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Talee this was great!! Wow, I`m truly not surprised that this won first place in a contest. When I read your post in the forum, I thought that you may want a more detailed comment than this, but I really don`t have much to say. It was just great and I would leave it how it is, anyone would just be wrong to give this anything lower than a 5! Loved it, great job. I see you`ve got a lot of top rated poems, and I`m honestly not surprised! =D Keep it up!
5/5

**Samantha Hollywood

Nice and sad one, but it is so great.5/5

Very nice, i felt it.

This is written to perfection. It flowed so nicely and held so much emotion throughout the whole piece. I love how at the end the her/she canged to my/me. Great write! 5/5

I thought this was beautifully sad. Almost like a sorrow-filled lullaby singing to my ears, I can't explain. Your poetry gets so much great recognition it deserves that there should be no doubt in your mind you have good talent Nat. Keep up your wonderful work as usual! 5/5

Wow, that was very strong, and I liked it very much. It almost made me cry. excellent poem 5/5

Ravyn

This is a very sad poem. I really like it. keep up the good work 5/5
xoxoxox
Jess

This is a really sad poem. I love it 5/5
xoxoxox
Jess

Its great! im glad it got first, it shows the judges have class... i would change the last line a little bit though i would take the all along off, it sounds more natural. its so true and realistic thats what makes it great! 5/5

This topic is very cliche, but no doubt many teens are going through this type of struggle, I myself have and have written poems on it also. I do feel however that the topic is cliche. And the poem isn't really something new and seems like the hundreds of others that I've read about the same thing. If you were to write another poem in this same vein, try to use more metaphors and stuff like that to make it a little less obvious about what you're talking about. As I said previously, if you ever need anyone to talk to, feel free to pm me. take care

Very nicely written. Deep, and i love the emotions that just pour out of it. 5/5