So sad. But so good. Sent it to a friend. Really meant something to me. Love u to comment on any of mine. 5'5

Wow this is really good.
I like the strong words you chose.

This poem is well written, and your ideas are pretty clear. I like that.

I think my favorite lines are the first ones:

If I was alone would you be there
Or would you leave me without a care
If I shed blood would you shed a tear
Or woulld you smear it and run away in fear

Somehow I can relate to them.

Good job!

XoXo
Gaby

I find the opening line's emphasis very endearing, but after that it really just became rather stale. There is some potential in this, but I am sure some people will agree: poetry like this is ten-a-penny on this site. It is not difficult to write.

But it's heartfelt and passionate, and that's a good place to start. Good on ya.

Seth, I liked the way this poem flowed and the rhyming was good. I was surprised that it was a love poem though because of the title but it fits. Keep writing. =]

Pip xxx