Good poem.
I liked it, it was insiteful, and made me think.
5/5

I disagree with Heather. I think it weas a bad poem with a lot of potential. You should elaborate on your theory in a manner that will compel us to read it in it's entirety. And the structure isn't really that strong here either.

You've picked a good philosophical topic but it just doesn't really have the depth that the subject matter deserves.

Please accept this as the constructive criticism it is meant to be.

Short and to the point. Very deep and thoughtful. One of those things i'd never stop to ponder well done. Take care.