Belly Up

by N J Thornton   Jul 6, 2006


Sat by the fusty loch,
with my least favourite orange jumpsuit
about to take a swim - both of us.
Even the belly-up fishes seem amused
as the flies hum at the "clown."
As my legs slide beneath the water,
curious hairs on the back of my neck
stand - and fall over laughing at
the olive grunge clinging to my
baggy suit.
Sarcastic sniggers and concerned
expressions are all I need,
(correction) - all I am given
to wish luck upon my daily swim.
Half closed eyes sneer as if
I am the insane one when I ask
the nearby apple tree for shade.
Nevertheless, my jumpsuit and I
have had a productive day -
alike, the winged nuisances enjoyed
a meal with the rotten fish.
However, if I were to titter at
the poor choice of cuisine my
tongue would be snapped by the
sincerity and the way of life.
I admire the lake as it turns from
teal to silver - sheep have faith
in the assertive, unfortunately I
am just a fool.
Degraded with my quaint orange and
mossy jumpsuit, I leave the rancid
fish belly-up.

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  • 18 years ago

    by Normal is the Watchword

    I really don't know if I knw the meaning of this poem nevertheless I enjoyed reading the words and your unique capturing descriptions. Especially the part (Correction) as though formal but with a hint of something else if I'm not wrong.

  • 18 years ago

    by xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex

    Not too bad.. I relaly didn't like the way you broke up the lines here ((formatting)), it just seemed wrong for the poem... But you used wonderful words and told a very different story... Good job.

    xDarkSuicidex 5.5

  • 18 years ago

    by Biscuit

    This is a fantastic poem...its both serious and amusing, the use of colours draws the reader in and creates a wonderful distinction/contrast between the objects they describe - the bright orange of the swimsuit compared to the dull green of the 'grunge'.

  • 18 years ago

    by Michael D Nalley

    Great free flowing imagery

  • 18 years ago

    by JarOme

    You write pretty deep i can almost recognize a few words. My english sucks but here i'm doing what i can. I like what you write. I may add you to my fav.

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