by N J Thornton Jul 6, 2006
category :
Life, society /
about society
Sat by the fusty loch, |
I really don't know if I knw the meaning of this poem nevertheless I enjoyed reading the words and your unique capturing descriptions. Especially the part (Correction) as though formal but with a hint of something else if I'm not wrong. |
Not too bad.. I relaly didn't like the way you broke up the lines here ((formatting)), it just seemed wrong for the poem... But you used wonderful words and told a very different story... Good job. |
by Biscuit
This is a fantastic poem...its both serious and amusing, the use of colours draws the reader in and creates a wonderful distinction/contrast between the objects they describe - the bright orange of the swimsuit compared to the dull green of the 'grunge'. |
Great free flowing imagery |
by JarOme
You write pretty deep i can almost recognize a few words. My english sucks but here i'm doing what i can. I like what you write. I may add you to my fav. |