by Arcane Blondie Jul 7, 2006
category :
Sadness, depression /
about depression
They all gather around dressed in black, |
by Jackie Marie
I like how you repeated "She was only 15" |
It may be another poem about a fake smile and an unexpected suicide, but you made it special. absolutely brilliant. |
Very good and deep. You do a great job of conveying an entire story in two stanzas... great job. |
by Krissey
Well the line that the above people have pointed out...I'd have to disagree..I didn't think there was anything wrong with it...this poem was about suicide and the line "No one knew the pain she endured" was just simply stating that she was holding to much pain and stress which know one knew of and it led to the funeral..I followed..but I do understand them saying that she didn't know of the pain it had on her mourners |
by Nelle
I really loved this poem..I have been in that situation before so i can kind of relate to this, it's not a fun position to be in, but normally any funeral isn't fun..I know many people who have wanted to kill them selves..some who actually have it's a very sad topic..I can't say i have never thought of it, hell i actually attempted it..but I guess what im trying to say is maybe This poem will tell me something, b/c it was great and very inspiring whether it is true or not, i loved it 5/5 |