Cute, but your ryhme scheme went away here :

sure it's all a lie
but we could be perfect just for tonight

and here:

sure it's not the truth
but what do you have to lose

but other then that... all I have to say is

"Ive got a lovely bunch of coconuts, there they are standing in a ro..."

Good poem keep up the good work!

timehealsallwounds*

This is awesome Cody! Keep it up. Talk ta ya in the chat room.
Love: Brittany

Thats funkey monkey lol i love its -plays with big bro- i like your poems cant wait to read more xoxroxyxox

Awesome job, cody!! poems don't always have to rhyme, just flow. 100/5
keep up the great work!!
~maggie

Hey Cody!! ...as u already no i luv alll ur poems...they are awesome = ) LOL (lots of luv) xoxo - DreaminOfSome1

I find this poem extremely interesting, its hard to place what it is about it but i like it alot. it has excellent flow and your word choice makes it work well. the repetetion of playing a game really sets it up symbolically. i loke this poem alot def a 5/5

Love it for sure
always great with words
i miss you

I like it not your best but I still like it nice job