Comments : Nameless.

  • 18 years ago

    by Kara !

    It's short, and very simple, which is obviously the effect you was going for, but I think you do need to clarify something. This line:

    "You never meant it."

    In the previous stanza, you'd put:

    "You said goodbye.
    You said don't cry."

    So is the reader to take that as he didn't mean to say 'goodbye', or 'don't cry', or, as I'm assuming, he never meant it when he said he loved you? Could be a little confusing for some readers.

    It's to the point, and I liked the repetition. Nice work Heather. x

  • 18 years ago

    by BlueEyedMystery

    I can really relate to this poem. I like how you kept it short and simple. I enjoyed the repetition. The flow was pretty good. Overall good poem.

    Cayce x

  • 18 years ago

    by Tara Kay

    You see, i liked the idea of the poem, but in my opinion it could have been better, it wasnt as strong or as deep as you could have made it. I have read some awesome poems of yours, and this one didnt really match. but it was still very good
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