I think you tell the story very well. If it's not something you went through personally, it sure is convincing. It sounds like it's oriented for some sort of children's/young ages book/audience. Is that right?

So much depth to it.lots of emotion,as i can imagine there is with divorce.my parents are divorced to and a lot of my poetry has to do w/it.if you ever need someone to vent to..just let me know.wonderful poem!!
--lexie

Awww sam! This was so sad, I'm sorry if this really happened to you. I love the last stanza, and this one "And leaking from her heart
Is something quite essential
A thing called inspiration
As she has no potential"

Great work
I love you sooo much!

--Steph

Definitely my favorite out of all the ones I have read! its a great poem. very emotional as well. I can relate bunches. great job and it was nice to read your poetry!

~~Retniapdoolb

A good idea well explained. Perhaps you can experiment a bit with your adjectives, even try writing a free verse, they really help to explore deep emotion, use good language and its sometimes really nice not to rhyme. This is a good poem, nice expression and ended very well. Keep it up!

And leaking from her heart
Is something quite essential
A thing called inspiration
As she has no potential

Now the young girl
Once so full of glee
Has been robbed of everything
Except her misery

These two stanzas stuck out and made a real impack on the poem. I loved them... The whole poem was really good as well.

xDarkSuicidex 5.5

Great write and i couldnt have said it better... and i can relate...

keep in touch

~David

WHat I liked about htis poem was the point of view it was written from and some of your descriptions. I thought it was a bit too much on the narrative side but you do have potential for your age.

Divorce is a hard thing!! I'm a divorced mom and my daughter goes to her dad every other weekend. However, both her dad and me still have a wonderful relationship with each other which really helps!!
Great job girlie! You know I love your work!

The last four stanzas are teh best, they really bring the poem together as it seems to struggle a bit at the beginning, overall a very clever poem with some amazing rhyming!

-biscuit-