I liked this one. It was very descriptive. Good use of language. Kinda long but thats not a bad thing really. I beg the tears to fall,
For their salt to fill the emptiness...

These two lines really caught my eye. I think it's because of the second line for their salt to fill their emptyness....awsome~!

I'll be honest, when reading the first stanza, I wasn't so sure, but as soon as I reached the second stanza, I was hooked. That has a lot to do with the description used in the second stanza and onwards.

"I pushed them down into an ocean,
Of deep, troublesome pain,"

A very good choice of words there, and some nice imagery throughout.

Maybe adding some descriptive vocabulary in the first stanza, but other than that, it's great. x

WOW!! Well I can actually say this with all honesty I am completely speechless..it was great, emotional, brialliant, amazing,perfect...umm it was just greatttttttttt! definitely 5/5

_Chanelle_.x

For some reason, this almost made me cry. I really like it. Behind all these words is so much feelings and emotions. They just kind of jump out at you.

Great job on this.

>black&&blue

You brought up a lot of good questions. Some of them can be answered, and some of them are more difficult to answer. This is one of those poems that get you thinking, reflecting. Awesome job on this one!..

Like I stated in your other poem, "Misery's Door," I like your use of a door as a metaphor.

In this poem, there is a lot of emotion. I assume that when "the door closes for the last time" that means death. Like when it's your time to go, as you also mention a clock in the satnza before that.

Very good job. You definitely have a lot of talent! Good job!

~BJ~ 5/5