You had a nice choice of words, which were pretty, but it was kinda confusing. it skipped from one thing to the next and i was lost. the words and lines were pretty. 4/5

It's Veryy Dreamy..To me anyway..But I got a biit Confused..noice poem though darl..

4.5/5

Eh...?

im guessing this guy really hurt the girl??
weres the rhymes?

october xx

It's clearly a poem of pain Stacey. She wants him but he hurts her very badly. I think we all can relate. Perhaps you could work on the cohesiveness. In the first stanza if you will, the thought process jumps from him leaning back to him ripping out her heart. The second stanza doesn't flow well from the first. You over use the word "back". The feeling and passion are there though.

This is preety good
i can imagine a guy acctually riping someones heart and waking away with it
its a small poems but it has feelings into it

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cool poem, i just wanted to point out my apparent superiority. =D
Love ya,
xxx

Not much detail or much reason but i liked the idea it should have been a bit longer though so that we the audience could grasp the idea of the story, i thought it had good words used ' dissapointment consumes' 'Elated, standing in the twilight' these are really good the wholep oem should have been more like this but im not saying it was bad your are a better writer than me lol keep it up :):):) xxxx alex xxxx

Um...I didn't really...feel...this poem much. It was OK, but it could've had a lot more emotion in it than it did. Keep it up! =) 4/5 xoxo

Samantha

I liked this poem, it shows alot of pain and i can actually relate... Keep it up!!!! Comment on mine sumtime!

Jay

Wow thats deep love it 5/5

Ooooo very deep and very good... i liked it a lot. keep it up

This is good it flows nicely. my gf writes some stuff kind of like this. i like it you did good.

:*( aww. your really good are you rally only 14? no offense its just im use to good poets who are a little older

Short. Sweet. Awesome! :D xo