It's very nicely written, you know..You have lots of feeling in your poem!! 5/5

Sis you know ill always be here let it flow you can always get better your really good just let it happen and waa i have writers block

True true. Forced rhyming.
But overall. It was a good write.

It had a shaky structure..
It all didn't, hmm, fit.
You know what I mean?
Build a stronger poem. =)

5/5
LOLLI

If your still looking for an edit, heres a start for you, try and step away from the rhyming. focus more on your intent and the words will roll onto the page with out a second thought:

Would you care if I slit my wrists, straight up and down?
Would you throw fists, and give up on me?
Would you care if I hung myself, come on baby, tempt me
Would you blame yourself, cause I won’t blame me

Is this how Johnny felt, as we left him all alone?
Is he sitting off in the distance, blaming me today?
Is this how we end it, you and I alone, you left me.

whether you use this or not it is your choice, but you must finish the poem. And make it still your own

Love always
Jenn

Wow great rhyme pattern ab ab ab

Tony :) thxs for commenting on my