Cayce, babe that was soooo sad! i can relate ALOT ALOT ALOT!!!! I feel the exact same about my ex and that stupid little girl...grrr Oh sorry! anyways, i loved this poem it was very touching

Ok, now when I read this as a song, it's just too short. The verses really need extending - because this song would be over in about two minutes, unless there are a lot of instrumental parts.

It's sad though, it truely feels it, and I can image many painful feelings drawn from this, so good work. x

This was really sad, but really good.
The verses were kinda short though.

Great song! I love the lyrics-they are very filled with emotion. I have trouble reading songs because I dont know exactly what the beat should be, but from the I read it it has a nice flow. Good write! 5/5

Awesome chorus! That's something I always look at with everyone's lyrics. The chrous always makes me wonder, why the heck can't I write a good chrous! lol anyways, good stuff. I still think your poetry needs to be happy!! lol *hugs* hope everything is ok!

YES! Finally! I've found someone's lyrics that I really enjoyed! You've def. done all the right things here. The third verse (bridge) should the the most powerful of the three, and this def. is. I absolutely LOVED this!!

5/5 for sure.

joy*:.xx

Usually i don't like reading lyrics or songs on here, because i like to hear the tune to the song, being a songwriter myself. but i actually liked reading this song - it was good! sad, but good. keep writing!
~rhi

Beautiful song! so tru for so many people! loved it!

Another great write... Emotional and heartfelt. Sorry to read about your sad story... hang in there... tomorrow is a better day. Beautifully written though. 5/5

Great job!! I especially liked the stanza that says 'I hope she breaks your heart, like you did mine' Its nice to hear some honest emotions!! On the last verse did you mean to write 'About HOW we loved and lost'?
Great job!! 5/5

Cayce -
This was really good! I kind of started singing it out loud ;; the rhyming was nice. Maybe it was just the way I was singing it, but the flow was a little disproportional. I gave it a 4/5 beacause it was kind of simple ;; but it was still pretty good. =D

love ya
hollywood

Chorus was really good...i didnt know the melody of the song so i couldnt really picture it in all its glory but even from what i read...it wowed me...keep it up!!

I really cried when i read this song!!