Bitterness

by tashhh   Jul 9, 2006


The bitterness starts this endless night,
and it lingers in the air.
another horrible fight,
and another day to bare.
I dream of dying soon,
I wake up hoping it's the day,
when everything dissapears,
and I fade away.
I wake up wondering why I'm here,
I wake up wondering why,
why I suffer the way i do,
why I get treated like I do by every guy.
I feel useless,
I feel used.

I don't know.
ah.
i'll finish it later..

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  • 18 years ago

    by Lost & Delirious

    I liked your poem, though more people would read it if you would change your i's for I's. I don't really care, I like it the way it is.

    In the first line you wrote: "The bitterness starts this endless night". I think that line is pretty cool, because I know those nights, and they are endless. The next lines are just as good and clear, I liked them and if they were more detailed they would be even better.

    I think the ending is something you can improve. But I think you haven't finished it yet, so, let me know when you do. I would love to read it.

    Good job!

    XoXo
    Gaby

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