Creature of the Dark

by BlueEyedMystery   Jul 9, 2006


Creature of the Dark

The night was stormy,
No one was out,
She walked through the streets,
With many doubts.

She heard a noise,
Like someone was following,
She turned around,
To find only trees blowing .

She brushed it off,
Thought she was imagining,
Tried to keep her mind still,
But the wind kept howling.

She felt someones breath,
Hit her bare neck,
She quickly turned around,
But there was only dust specks.

Her heart was pounding now,
She picked up her pace,
She wanted to get home,
So the wind she would race.

"You can not outrun me",
She heard chilling whisper,
She ran even faster,
But the thing behind her was quicker.

She felt big icy hands,
Wrap around her waist,
They pulled her closer,
So she could not escape.

"This will only hurt a little",
The same voice said,
A sharp pain in her neck,
Told her she would soon be dead.

Blood was being drained,
By the creature of the dark,
She took her last breath,
The world she did part.

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  • 18 years ago

    by Esther

    Likd but kindda creepy(soz)!!

  • 18 years ago

    by .. !!-D a R r i N-!! ..

    I could never really get into dark poems, but this one really caught my attention. The way you kept building up the story made me want to keep reading. Great write. 5/5

  • 18 years ago

    by Momentary Relapse

    This sounds like something I've written....not kidding. So...well the descriptions were well and the words flowed nicely together. But it's really weird that I'm reading something similar to what I've already seen a long time ago. Okay....well yes this was.........despite being something really familiar it had such an intense way about it and was really good. Really, really great words and flow and imagery.
    ~Faith-less

  • 18 years ago

    by LockedInEternity

    @...As i read this poem my eyes were glued to the screen!!...It was such an exciting and at the same time it was chilling read!!...A vampire?..wow...u described it all too well:)...@

  • 18 years ago

    by Samantha Hollywood

    Caycee -
    Great job! The rhyming in this poem was very complex ;; which deifinitely added a nice twist and made it more fun to read. It grasped my attention, and the flow was perfect throughout the poem. Great job. 5/5

    Love ya,
    Sam

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