Wow, I really liked this poem. The imagery was unbelievably good! You are a great writer.

Vampire? Always a great subject.. so dark and seductive. Nice work

Wow that was really deep and dark. As I read it my heart started beating faster. A lot of imagery!! and the flow is flawless----Great write 5/5

I really liked the build up in the first stanza, it made everything scary. The perfect setting. The following stanzas were great, and it kept the dark theme. Wow, that ending was a 'KILLER' lmao! Ohh man, sorry I crack myself up. Yeah, this was a really good poem, I really liked how you started, built up, and ended this poem. It was a very good write.

Gave me chills, AND kept me reading!! Loved it. The only thing, you're repetitive with opening a line with "she". Try to change that up a bit.

5/5

joy*:.xx

That was really good! it had a great flow, and it was really dark. i like the killer ending. it made me kinda scared since i'm in my dark house at 2 A.M....lol! =) 5/5
~rhi

I love dark poems told into stories. This one was brillantly told. I really loved each stanza, its immediate flow, and also the rhyming didn't get too out of check, it was just right. A tale of seduction... who couldn't love it? I really liked the last stanza, also, it brought the whole piece together. Great Job!

Wow, almost gave me the chills. great write, and something most people dont write about, loved it!

Wow... nicely done. Intense... good flow and rhythm. Keeps the reader on the edge of their seat. Great write! 5/5

Wow!! Great descriptions and adjectives!! I could totally envision it!! This poem is a lot different from the ones I usually read on here! GREAT JOB!! 5/5

Caycee -
Great job! The rhyming in this poem was very complex ;; which deifinitely added a nice twist and made it more fun to read. It grasped my attention, and the flow was perfect throughout the poem. Great job. 5/5

Love ya,
Sam

@...As i read this poem my eyes were glued to the screen!!...It was such an exciting and at the same time it was chilling read!!...A vampire?..wow...u described it all too well:)...@

This sounds like something I've written....not kidding. So...well the descriptions were well and the words flowed nicely together. But it's really weird that I'm reading something similar to what I've already seen a long time ago. Okay....well yes this was.........despite being something really familiar it had such an intense way about it and was really good. Really, really great words and flow and imagery.
~Faith-less

I could never really get into dark poems, but this one really caught my attention. The way you kept building up the story made me want to keep reading. Great write. 5/5

Likd but kindda creepy(soz)!!