by BrokenMisery Jul 9, 2006
category :
Love, romance /
lost love
[Verse1] |
by N J Thornton
Overall not bad at all. The first verse started very well, original ideas. It confused me slightly then when the subject changed from smoking to four leave clovers to a room in hell. You used a couple of cliche words again, blood was used twice in this. The first six lines of the bridge were very clever too, I liked those. |