ME and You

by X2892   Jul 9, 2006


When me and you
are together I have a clue
of how much happy
I am with you, all jumpy
inside with happiness.

Everyday I wait
to see you,mabe just for a little bit.
That time with you is enough for me
just to see
the beauty you hold.

I ask myself
what I would do without you,
but if I had a clue
I see i would be sad,
lonelyand always in bad
mood.

You are my happiness
and my joy to making
my perfect days.

Hope you feel the same.
I love you so much ^.^

Copyright © Paul Salazar

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  • 18 years ago

    by Ashley Ann

    AWWWW that is so adorable! lol great job! 5/5

  • 18 years ago

    by Jenni Marie

    I think the flow was kinda jumpy, but there was a lot of meaning behind the words. 4/5

  • 18 years ago

    by Dumpstead

    Okay; Look I will be ver honest because you have a lot of time and things that you should improve.

    I read four of your poems and in everyone of them I feel that the flow is not quite there through out. Your first and second stanzas melt together well but then on I feel the poems loses it's integrity.

    I also see a lot of words that you have put in the poems because you couold not find others I think. Try to not put any word(not even a a, an, are .... anything) if it does not express excatly want you want to say. You have a concept in your poems, thought mostly love, it is well but somewhere you are failing to visualize your concept.

    My humble apologies if I have sonced harsh, if you are interested private message me and we will talk some more.

  • 18 years ago

    by Goran Rahim

    Another great poem with a great message out, i really like your poems, another 5/5 from me.

  • 18 years ago

    by xXx3moBabe1507xXx

    Hey, i really like ur poem...its sweet i wish my bf would actually do sumtin like this

    lol

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