Endless Pain

I agree the ending was disappointing! The poem was good but i felt that the rhyme was a little forced through out the poem and therefore the poem lost it's ability to captivate! It was a good attempt but remember rhyming is not poetry, it's good but when used correctly! It can detract from the true emotions of the poem! Try write a poem from the heart, like a letter, it's honest and therefore the best poem you'll ever write! Don't worry about technique worry about truth and you might be suprised at how much you'll like it!

Has some emotional qualities that was interesting. Not exactly the best but it wasn't all too bad. The ending felt almost like a disappointment. But well some cool images were captured along with the emotions portrayed.
~Faith-less

Nice. Good job.