Ally -
I think this is a terrific piece of writing. It was very detailed and full of emotion ;; I loved it !! No complaints.
How did it do in the contest? First place? I wouldn`t be surprised.
5/5
Much thanks for your comments on my poetry, meant a lot. =D

Love ya,
Samantha Hollywood

Loved it in my contest, and still love it now. I think you did a very good job of using the phrases, and I liked it a lot. A very good poem. 5/5

Ravyn

Love it..

Give me another chance to break you heart.
[[should be your]]

I thought you did a good job considering you had to use certain phrases throughout the poem, and I -think- I know what contest this was for. Excellent job! 5/5

Natalie``

Ohhh. I liked this. Great wording and the flow was pretty well to. Kept my attention. :]

Wow, surprising ending. Try to work on the flow a bit

Good Job, the flow was a little rocky, and instead of "Give me another chance to break you heart." I t should be "Give me another chance to break your heart."! I thought it was pretty good since you had to do it for a contest and all!! 5/5!!