Nice emotional poem... It is very sensitive... Well done!

This poem had me thinking real hard sometimes. I don't think they were grammatical errors.. lol.. but i personally don't understand many dark poems. The message of this one though came through heavily, and that, i fully understood. Beautifully written. 5/5.

-Darrin

Okay...so there's some words that kinda messed with the flow and just how some were worded really messed me up. The line:

"like the sweetest candy just you tasted"

In case you do care 'just you tasted' would sound better if it was 'you just...' instead. Up to you. But overall this had been nice. Some excellent imagery and word play. Really loved the last stanza which seemed to be the strongest.
~Faith-less

It was a strong poem with a lot of detailed words. I can see some of thes images you created. The emotions felt in this poem were great, an overall good dark poem. Keep on writing!

Aw this was so sad, im sorry:( I dont know what i would do without my boyfriend.I liked the idea of it and even though it didnt rhyme it still flowed really well.

--Steph

This poem is so deep, it makes the reader think allot, and that is something you don't find in allot of poems these days, YOu create Marvoluse pictures with your words.

I liek this.
very different to what im used to.
not the same old same old...
Omg he left stuff
its very original.
~Emah
5/5

Awwww. ye seul, this was soo good!! it has to be the best poem you have written! i loved it.. your descriptions are beautiful and the emotion was just so clear.. wonderful job! 5/5