This poem was excellent. It sends a powerful message. People shouldn't push themselves to be something they're not at the expence of losing themselves. And society becomes the hypocrit. Wonderful poem, I loved it, I really did. You have such a talent.

But what we are
Is all we are.
All we are,
Is what shines from afar.

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i loved that stanza...absolutely loved it..this was an amazing poem..it was very very well written, and expressed a lot of emotions..i definitely give it a 5/5 it was wonderful!

Beautiful, but sad. How many poems seem to go that way these days? *Sigh* Good piece anyway. It was quick and flowed nicely.
5.5

As always~ Kate

It was quite good.
had many different qualities quite enjoyable.
thanks for sharing
~Emah

Sooooo true!! i found the second half of the poem was much better than teh first. well done. it rocks

This is the perfect message. I love it.
Very true and very powerful and insp.

5/5
keep it up

God Bless

-chris

Uhh, only problem is the title.

"Be Everyting - But What You Are?"
[I think you meant 'Everything']

Might wanna fix that up. Uhh, as for the contents of the poem, I thought it was alright. I mean, I read a lot of teenage poetry, so this is all the same to me. As for flow and rythym, it was good. Style was different, so overall, this poem is good. I guess a 5/5, nothing too huge.

It had a good and powerful message. The flow and rhyming were good. I like the style of the poem, it was unique. So overall I thought it was a good poem. I agree with Lady Vengeance though the second half was deffinately better than the first half. Good job.

Cayce x

Very nice poem- thanks for sharing it with us
I have a new poem now "Phone Booth"- i would really appreciate it if you could read/rate it :)

This is such a beatifully sad poem. i think it was a really great piece and ou can really see how taented you are when you read it. keep up the good work

~sos

Hold on, don't let go,
Fight it off, don't let it show.
Truth is there, look inside,
Never falter, never cry.
You can make it, just believe,
Keep it up, just try.
Be a hero, be a star,
Be everything - but what you are.

Favorite part! 5/5

-Taylor

5/5

i really like this one

I liked this one but it feels kind of unfinished. The message is a good one, a perfect one, it fits the american society like a glove, but i feel likeyou could make it better. Form your other writing I feels like you could just make this better somehow. I donmtknwo what you would change, but otherwise its good and I did like it.