I lovedddd this it was soo sad, it brought tears to my eyes mainly b/c i can relate to this alot..i have/had someone in my life that makes me feel like that, and it seems like it doesnt even matter..but yeah, it was filled with tons of emotions you really poured your heart out..it was great 5/5

I thought it went on too long. I think you basically repeated yourself but just used different words to express the same thing. Maybe if you specefied some so each stanza is a slightly different scenario or something.

Aw this is so sweet. very sad thou..
great choice of words and good work

Keep it up..ofcourse not sad poems.lol
NemO xxxxxx

Aww this is such a sad poem. Especially when you mention, you wanted to die because of that person. I just hope you realize your life is worth more than that !!! *Hugs* aww Nat, this was a sad poem :(
but don't worry, I'm here!! lol to make you smile !! :)

I'll comment on the right poem now. lol.

"You carve your harsh words into my delicate heart,"

I love that line. It feels so raw. The whole poem is full of emotive description, and I can feel the pain and heartbreak. You've started well, and kept it going right through to end, without sending the reader into boredom.
Very good work. x

Talee -- this was really good! The rhyming and the flow worked out really well, it was great!
5/5

Samantha Hollywood

This poem is amazing, I like it entirely. It's well written, clear, and descriptive. I loved the rhyming, and your word choice is excellent.

Great job!

XoXo
Gaby

This by far has been an awesome poem i loved it so much i dont cry much but if i did that probally would have made me but like i said great poem.

Very emotionally descriptive, straight from the heart. I think that shorter lines could have a greater impact in a sense of urgency, but i like the almost harsh language. Good job.

Yo decent poem. Well, to me. I guess I just didn`t relate to it, but good work! I know some people who would love it!

Beautiful Poem. I love it.
5/5

Beautiful write my dear. Very sad and depressing...Your emotion was over whelming. I loved it.

Omg this is awesome!!! keep up the awesome work check out some of my poems sometime!!!
-hayley

I can promise I am no stranger to the feelings you expressed in this poem. Life is hard and feelings suck sometimes don't they. Hold on baby, they say it gets better evenually. (I'm still waiting.)

-Tainted

Your very talented.

I'd like to tell you how much this affected me, I've been where you are.

It took me 2 years to get help.

I refused even when they had to stitch me up. I still didn't care enough about my problem to make it stop.

But now I do have help, and it made me realize how precious life is. And how much I want to help people so they wont feel the way I did.

If you ever want to talk, i'll always be here for you.

www.myspace.com/always_my_konstantine

AIM- dziak01

YAHOO- hedpenation

MSN- sacredtheory01@hotmail.com

I really like this. It's very wonderfully written and easy for some to relate to. Keep up the brilliant work!

Very nice. I can truely relate, I am living your poem

Wow...is all i can really think of to say
I could feel all of your emotions come alive when i read your poem!!!! Great job

Wow! that was so good, and i totally know how you feel! Thank you for what you said about my poem, it really means a lot to me.

Your nice poem. I have been there done that. You say it so wonderfully. 5/5