Goodbye Kiss

by Shawna   Jul 10, 2006


Here's another poem I wrote when I was 15 or 16.

A lonely whisper never heard
A broken heart without a word
A corrupted mind, a corrupted soul
All because my love you stole

No longer do I feel the glow
My love I will no longer show
Hidden beneath the black sun
Tears will fall from what you've done

Take me and my angel into sin
Then give me your devil grin
Laugh as I cry and fall in shame
Play me as if I were a game

Lie to me like there's no end
Then say to me, "You're only a friend"
The razor so sharp, red velvet drips
And where is my goodbye kiss?

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  • 18 years ago

    by Sole

    The question on the last line gives so much impact and emotion to the poem. A great technique, well written. Nice poem, flow was great.

    Peace. [Sole]

  • 18 years ago

    by BlueEyedMystery

    I can somewhat relate to this one. The flow and rhyming were both very good. I liked your word choice in this one. Great job!

    Cayce x

  • 18 years ago

    by Tara Kay

    Well done my friend, this poem was great. the rhymes worked well, the flow was spot on and i loved it.
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    thanks for the comments on mine
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  • 18 years ago

    by Darien

    That was good!.. I liked the rhymes and the flow was on. Awesome stuff. The only thing about this poem, is I read stuff like that too often, so some of these ideas seemed unoriginal, but that's ok, still great poetry.

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