Very sweet and again I can't find much to critisise. I did not like the first piece of talking because talking generally does not rhyme so it seems un-natural however the second part, being a vow is understandable. Its nicely written, flows smoothly and you are certainly a great authour. Best of luck.

WOW is all i can say to this. It was an exquisite piece. The flow was amazing. Totally brilliant, a masterpiece of the heart.

Aww omg that was so sweet.
Now I want someone to love.
That was such a beautiful poem. I really loved it.
There is nothing else to say about this
WOW
I can't wait to read more of your poetry in the future.
5/5
Breanna

Wow....
what a beautiful poem.
its breathtaking!
excellent word usage as well as fantastic rhyming.
the vibe of this poem is so bright and etherial
i love it

Nice! Really nice it was good, it was wonderful. The flow was great one word fit into the next great job you are a wonderful poet!

I like how it flowed together very nice and this is a very sweet poem good job 5/5

So beatifully romantic, I am speechless !( I never thought that would ever happen...me speechless OMG.....lol)
My heart is all melting and everything . The flow is magical and the entire poem is beautiful .

You have painted a beautiful picture of love and devotion .....awww just beautiful.

Wow...dude...this is really nice....very well planned out...the words are simple and effective...good job...nice one...cheers

OMG i LOVED TtHATt!!!!!!!!!

Ohmygoodness! It's amazing! It's absolutly wonderful, I love every single word of it! Great Great Great job!

Ii lovee itt!!!

This poem was so sweet and it was rele romantic....well if u are getttin married i bet ur vows will be even more beautiful i loved the poem tho...

Hey u. i was soo happy wen u commented on my poem!! havent heard from u in ages!! i was rapt l0l anyway this was really g0od p0em. beautifully w0rded. great j0b very touching. always l0ve readin ur work! keep it up! xx

This is excellent. I love the way you put your words together and how you make your words so alive and vivid. i like it very good. keep it up!!!!!!!

Oh my god!! The poem's so cute!!! I love it so much!!! Keep up the good work!

I love it!! it was very sweet!

**molly**

I must say darien your work is truly a masterpiece, a work of art i tell you. you dont stumble upon too many poems with the nice ryhme and context all at the same time but i guess this one is one in a million.bravo and encore.

Wow.....i loved it.....you did an incredible job.....

Love that peom.your wife is lucky to have a husband like you.from this peom it sounds like your wedding is beautiful.much luck on your new life with your wife.

Aw. That truly was very sweet and romantic. The rhyming made it all flow together very nicely. Lovely work
xxx Ami