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Wow great poem. Very dark and beautiful. The words are extremely powerful in simple lines it really leaves an impact on the reader. Nothing seemed forced, just well thought out. Keep it up! xxx

Hey I really liked this poem. You portrayed loneliness so well. I also liked the structure and the flow. You write very well. I'm looking forward to read more from you. And thanks for your sweet words on Lonely Moon, I really appreciate it.

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Nice poem!! Sounds like a transformation of one lover, after a pleasant time, into the other one. Given up individuality, own principles because of the love one of them felt, still feels, and suffers from.

"Day after day gone unnoticed
Lost in reverie of death"

This lines express that it is a one-sided love, an unnoticed lover, maybe because of his character. Lost in a reverie of death : a dream about death or maybe the wish to be dead after all.

best wishes
Insignia

You have a very unusual style. I think you wander a bit. I think you try to put to much into one poem. Not trying to hurt ur feeling. Just a couple of hints. I really liked it though.Reminds me of me

'I scream in hate
I cry in pain'

these lines repeated in my head, after i had finished reading. great imagery!

keep 'em coming
jm... (p.s thanks for the comment) =))