Comments : Slowly tearing

  • 18 years ago

    by Bridgette

    This is really good. I can definitely relate to it. The only advice I have to give you is to maybe break it up a bit to give it some structure. Put it in stanzas according to the flow. But I love the emotions behind it. Great job on this. 5/5

  • 18 years ago

    by Hope

    Good job on this poem.
    I know what you feel like kinda.
    But I like this guy thats my best friend.
    But now he hates me cause his gf does.
    I just wish I could find someone that loves me for me.
    && you will find that person too.

    Love,
    Hope-Ann

  • 18 years ago

    by Pretend--ToLoveMe

    I really like this peom because one you are great at putting so my emotions into words. It's crazy. And Second, the lines "I brought this upon myself..
    so I don't need you to help guide me
    I was fine on my own before with nobody else beside me" are wonderful because it's true, I mean.. we [usually] know how things will end.

    Overall. Wonderful. Keep up the grand work.