Wow this is really good. The title fits it perfectly! You did a wonderful job.

This is awesome. Keep up the good work.=) Much love.

-*La Little Lor Lor*

Or maybe were so content that our mind does not process any other way, and our
eyes do not see any other way.
Though are heart feels many ways.
[I think saying the word "way" alot kinda threw it off.]
At times we are lost, following this dark path.
When all we need to do is beleive, believe that everything will turn out for the better and
uphold faith.
And the lord will shine his light on each path.
[I liked that stanza alot. I thought it was really insperational.]
The real happiness lies beneath our skin and in our heart.
[I think you should say "and in out hearts" cause your talking about a group of people.]

I thought it was a pretty good poem though. A little sad though. But it was good. Keep it up! 5/5

`Taleee. xx.

Very nice. it had a happy, warm feeling to it, however i didn't think it was as impressive as the first poem i read of yours. it didn't have an easy to follow rhythm. still, very warming : )

Hm... You have real talent. You grabbed me with your writing and got me hooked, haha. But really, you are so good. Never stop writing!

Love,

Tina

Throught the poem you used the word "were" when you really should be using "we're" with an apostrophe. It breaks the word into 'we are' rather than being the past tense of 'be'. That's all I can read. Other than that, it was a great write.

I really liked this one. It flowed really well. It held my attention too. I don't really have very much to say about this poem. It was really good. Lol. That's all I can think of. Keep it up!

Cayce x

We all wish for hope and we all try to not let go....
once again great write! keep up the greta work!

A little long, but brillaint! It really caught my eye and made me want to keep reading, it was absolutely awesome!
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