by Heather Jul 11, 2006
category :
Sadness, depression /
lost relationships
I think about you everyday. |
by Tara Kay
The repition worked very well, and i loved every line of this poem, keep writing, you have some good talent there |
by nikki
Dude i can sooo relate this is rly good i rly like it 5/5 |
by Natalie
I liked the repitition of it. I thought you could say this though "And it hurts me so bad" I dunno. Just a suggestion. It was a sad poem though. Keep it up! 5/5 |
by BrokenMisery
Very sad but i think the repetativeness got a little too much and the lines in between could be more deep and meaningful as far as the image you ere trying to put across. I also think "anyways" should be "anyway". A very emotional poem, a good job and keep writing. 4/5 |
Aw, i'm sorry for your pain, this is so sad. I was a good poem, everything rhymed and it really shows creativitiy that you could find so many thingd you rhyme with "everyday" Great work on this one. |