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  • 18 years ago

    by Angie

    Hey! Beautiful poem! Short yet wonderfully done. I love the lines:

    "losing all hope of freedom
    fading, all signs of light
    so much for me to regret
    haunting my once peaceful night"

    Nicely said. The only thing I would suggest is, maybe you can add some comma's and periods are each line, just so that it might give the reader more direction. But it's not a must.

    Anyways, keep up the awesome work! woot! 5/5

    --Angie xoxo

  • 18 years ago

    by catherine

    I love it.