Awsome poem it was sOo dark but beautiful all the same =]

Thats..so..wow

Wow.. I really really like this poem. It's so creepy and gave me chills as I was reading it. I'm not really sure what I can say about it.... It was amazing, I loved it. My favorite stanza was:
Here in the graveyard bodies lay to rest,
Richer than gold mines and oil derricks.
Dreams and ideas buried six feet under,
What could have been? we now wonder.
But great job on this. 5/5

Very dark i like this 5/5

This is different. But different is good. :) Its sad that people get murdered and commit suicide everyday. And we never know how their life could have turned out. Kind of like you are watching a movie, and it just STOPS right in the middle. You know? Excellent job.

>black&&blue

I found the ABCC rhyming pattern of the stanzas very interesting. I think it might be the first time I've ever seen something like that.

I also really liked this part:
"Only in the graveyard can peace be kept,
Everyone is equal under Mother Earth."
It made me think of people like racists, and how ironic it would be to get a racist buried in a plot next to a black man, or something. Probably not what you were going for, but it inspired thought, which is always a good thing.

Great stuff :) I always like your work (I've had you bookmarked for quite some time ;)).

It all ending tragically with one last breath.

I personally think you should have used 'ends' instead of 'ending'. But that's me.

Otherwise, I'll admit, while written beautifully I was a bit confused on where exactly you were giong. And at the end it didn't justify so I'm still a little lost. But nonetheless it was still an amazing poem; I really enjoyed it. Great job.

xDarkSuicidex 5.5

Excellent. Your choice of words for this is wonderful. I love the idea of lifes struggles coming to a united end.
Great job

Another Amazing Job...Your an amazing write...5/5

Woah this is excellent

Superb poem, imagery is excellent and you painted incredible picture with emotions. Some lines are simply amazing, very original too. I like your wording and you wrote it greatly. Well done, you should be proud on this piece, some of your thoughts that you described in this poem are depressive but anyway that just add more effect. Well done, you really deserves 5/5 on this one.