It seems like an eternity,
As the walls seem to move closer,

The shadows form themselves,
Into horrible images of hate,
I reach back over to the lamp,
But this time its too late

very descriptive lines. the terror comes on so powerfully in them.

enjoyed reading your work. thank you very much for your comments on mine.

good luck and peace
shobhana

This was a really good poem, very descriptive in everything that was happening. The rhymes and flow were great, however there was a line that stuck out most. I mean stick out, by being to long. I think you know which one I am referring to. Lol, well you should try to cut it down. Other than that, it was a great poem! love the dark poerty!

OMG!! i can relate to this poem SOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOo much...I don't remember if you read my poem about this..but yes, i can definitely relate!!! this was great and expressed a lot of meaningful things...great job 5/5

The imegry and content of this peice are very powerful. it is very well written with a good run of ideas and smooth flow.l

I agree with Darien about the line that's too long. You know the one! lol

Usually when I make comments like that I offer some sort of alternative, but right now I'm struggling. Can I get back to you? :-D

BTW I enjoyed it a lot. It reminded me of when we first moved home when I was a kid. I hope you keep this poem somewhere safe and read it back when you're older. Stuff like this is very precious.

Very discriptive and it makes you wanna read more... Well done

Steph -
Wow, great job! The suspense of this poem definitely made me want to read a sequal -- consider it, love? =D
The flow and rhyming was perfect throughout the whole thing. You`re pretty well spoken. You do know that, don`t you?
Great job!! 5/5

Love ya /
Samantha Hollywood

Wow, great written, it is so beautiful.
great job, 5/5

From my own experience that's not what real 'night terrors' are. But I really loved the poem anyways. I'd just say it's not the perfect title for the poem. You have a great rhyming scheme and a nice flow. And, if you don't mind, that gave me an idea I'd like to try to work off of. If that affends you, email me.

xDarkSuicidex

Keep it up.

Alot Of Mystery And Drama Expressed In This Poem...Well Written...It Sounds Like a Nightmare....Its Like Reading The Best Part Of a Suspense Novel 5/5
*Friends For Life*
xoxo-Nikki-xoxo
Ps: Way To Go On This Stanza "The creatures in my room,
Seem prepared to pounce on me,
I fumble for the lamp,
A light so I can see,"...It Caught My Eye

Creepy, my whole body was trembling when i read that. It was so dark and scary and the ending punced on me, it was a wierd feeling, i tell you.
I thought the imagery and the tenseness really made that poem stand out, keep writing
x
xxxxx

Omgoodness wow...such a great poem! 5/5

The rhythm broke a few times and the end if the 3rd stanza seemed too long.
but other then that i enjoyed it.
4/5
~Emah

Wow. I have had some rough nigtmares in the past few years, and I vividly remember watching the time slowly tick away until the night wasover and I could get up. This poem really brought my memories back, and though it hut a little, I'm surprised, and impressed of course, at the technique you used and how it really did seem to make the dreams come alive.

Peace. [Sole]

Hauntingly beautiful poem.

Quite original.

[Tragic]

Great poem. different than the last one i read, but thats what makes things interesting, changing it up. well written. good job.
Driver

Wow.. another amazing one... the only thing i would change is the last line in the third stanza.. its just too long and doesnt flow with the poem

I like the ending. Good one!