Hold My Breath {Terza Rima Sonnet}

by Natalie   Jul 12, 2006


I'll hold my breath as you walk right beside me,
A moment like this should always be treasured,
Because in your arms is where I long to be.

The love that is in my heart you have captured,
Never will these feelings I have go astray,
Words from my mouth and soul will not go unheard.

You hold the key to what I'm yearning to say,
If only you would come and unlock my door,
I'd tell you exactly how I feel today.

The love in your heart is what I'm searching for,
With my two bare hands I try to dig and find,
Who the special person is that you adore.

Do you see me standing here or are you blind?
Needing you is the only thing on my mind.

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A Terza Rima is a poem with an eleven
syllable count in each line and a rhyming scheme
of aba, bcb, cdc, dd.

For even more of a challenge, try the Terza Rima
Sonnet. This form of poem has an eleven syllable
count in each line and a rhyming scheme of aba,
bcb, cdc, ded, ee.

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{It's my first go at trying one of these, I'd really like to know if I did alright at it. Thanks.}

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  • 17 years ago

    by We Miss You Shannon

    Good work

  • 18 years ago

    by Paggles

    Very Interesting...I googled Terza Rima Sonnet, and one of the very first hits was this poem. It may be coincidence, but I belive your poem to be a prime example of the form! Nice job on a first try.

    Paggz

  • Another great write Nat! The one thing i love about reading your poetry is that you try all different types of styles, it makes it more interesting to read!!! I loved the last two lines it ends with such emotion!!
    "Do you see me standing here or are you blind?
    Needing you is the only thing on my mind."

    Great Job!!! 5/5

  • 18 years ago

    by goddess-glamourpuss

    Very good for a first attempt. I think the problem with this type of poem is the strict rhyme scheme and flow but you carried it of well None of the rhymes seemed at all forced and flowed really well.
    I love the subdued frustrated feel that comes out in the final 2 lines.
    5/5

  • 18 years ago

    by Serenical Darkness

    Not bad at all congrats on an awesome 5/5 job