Times Have Changed

This truely captures how I feel. At first it was hard for me to read because I write a little bit different, but then I got the flow and I read it about three times and I could feel the poetry behind the words, then the message (subject) sunk in and I was like "This is exactly how I feel about growing older and fighting it!" I liked this, and your talent is excellent. You have the ability to write in "style" (format) and I wish I could do that. I am usually able to only write in the moment of extreme passion. (rage, anger, happiness, desire, etc...)

Hmm. This is a reply from your post on some serious contest you wanted to enter. i would think this is serious enough. i like it. jeez its hard to choose which one to put into the contest.

Enthusiasm is growing tedious;
I am older than I used to be

An honest poem with good contradictions. I like that it is not just simple emotions that are tied to getting older. it shows awareness yet acceptance. I really liked it.

Honestly, this was one of your better writes. The message of the poem was one even the person least interested in poetry would be able to figure out. I like how the ending line was the same or about to the econd line. It rounded the poem out nicely. I also liked how you had described getting older in kind of funny way and not totally serious:
Still, I cannot do a touch to slow down
the phases of the moon,
A very nice metaphor you have there.

It bugs me I cannot speak fluent fun

[[Um... what?]]

Otherwise, I enjoyed the read. It was very soft with emotion... Not horribly strong, but definately not weak, which really did good things for this poem.

xDarkSuicidex 5.5