Oh great job. It's different and creative the rhyming flowed and it was beautiful!

Ambeirnaa*

Well done =) That poem was really good, and i enjoyed reading it. Thanks for the comment you left on my newest poem, it means alot.
Take care,
Rachelxx

I love this poem. its so good. u have so much talent. i wish i could write like htis. i like how the poem flows and the rhythm is great and so is hte word choice. keep on writing i will keep reading. great job... i have read ur quotes and i like those too. keep it up take care
angie

This is really good work

"love is something you can't just pretend."
^ so true. I get this poem..I really do get it, and I think a lot of people can. I think a lot of people have been there. Have been crushed, hurt, broken- by a lie and a promise come undone because, I suppose, it was never actually real to begin with. It has a strong message and your words clearly mould the pain and sadness that I am sure you were feeling while writing this. The beuty of poetry is being able to express all that.
Great job! =] keep it up. =]
--Viola

p.s. thanks for the comment on my poem. it made me smile. :)