Completely lost it

by Nelle   Jul 13, 2006


STOP telling me that I have changed
STOP saying you want the old me back
STOP saying "Chanelle you are not the same"
STOP yelling at me, because ya know what, it's not helping
STOP going on and on about how much you love me
STOP saying " Look at yourself, what has happened to you"
Just STOP it and leave me alone
People change, things happen
Life goes on, oh and yeah some people acually die
You think you know what is best for me
You think you know what exactly is wrong with me
Well my advice to you, STOP thinking so much
Because you don't know, you know NOTHING!
If you want the old me back, well I don't know what to tell you
Once you see that the way I am is because of all of this
Then maybe you will see, I can't be the old me
Until then, let me do as I please
If you don't like my attitude now a days
Well, here is a solution
DONT TALK TO ME!
See, there ya go I will give you all the answers you want
All you have to do is ask

(this isn't really a poem and it doesn't rhyme it probably doesn't even make sense...it is full of a lot of anger and it HAD to be said!)

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  • 18 years ago

    by nikki

    Wow i rly like this i can rly relate this is rly good. keep up the awesome work 5/5

  • 18 years ago

    by Unforgiven Retniap doolb

    Yeah your right it is not that great but sometimes you just need to vent. I think if you thought about this and worked with it you could form it into another nice poem but right now it seems like a mess.
    rewrite it and I'm sure it will become a great poem.

    ~~Retniapdoolb

  • 18 years ago

    by Ed or Ian Henderson

    Am I reading the same poem as everyone else? I mean no disrespect, but you did ask for comments, so I will do.

    This has no discernible structure to it. Some may call it "freeform" but to me it looks like a directionless rant that, as you put it, NEEDED to be said.

    But not here.

    I am with Lorraine: It is a good display of raw emotion, and if you were writing a play and had this as a monologue I would hold my breath to its completion. But it's NOT poetry, and yet it COULD be.

    That's my honest opinion: you could do a lot with this. But as it stands it just doesn't cut the mustard. Sorry.

  • 18 years ago

    by Kara !

    Yeah, this really doesn't seem to have any rhythm, which makes it prose more than a poem. I get your angry though. You definately got that message through.

    I'd suggest working on the flow, and actually turning it into a poem. lol.

    I like how you used caps to emphasize the word 'stop'. Original.

    x

  • 18 years ago

    by Vegetable

    Great display of raw emotion. It's very powerful. I think it would be great if you could work it into more of a poem without loosing any emotion. It's just a suggestion- it's good right now. Nice job.

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