I cant believe this has only been given a 3.3!! i think its excellent, uv written in a very poetic way even tho its 'not really a poem', its very original and the language is very appropriate, both for a diary and a poem! a fantastic achievement! :)

-biscuit-

Matter haw many times I ask
[how]

Poor ending.. That last line just shot it to the ground... I advice taking it out. But the rest of the entry was rather strong and pretty good.

xDarkSuicidex 5.5

Amazingly sad. It's wonderful. I could feel the emotion and power in it. I loved it.

Aww... that is extremely sad but so very well written. I love the lines:
I'm so lost. Please God, I beg you, come find me. Rescue me from this forsaken ground to which I'm desperatly bound.
Those really stood out to me. But I think you did a great job on this. Very creative idea. I loved it! 5/5

Wow...Another sad poem. Heh. I liked it though. I liked your idea and creativity you used for it. Didn't mind being diffrent. Lovely job.

[Bye Diary, My last breath is upon me, I'm finally free to spead those wings && fly...]

Ooo! I liked that part! ^_^ Lol. It was the part that mostly popped out to me. I thought it was excellent, although it's a diary entry. I liked how you thought of the idea of spreading your wings to fly. Great touch. =) 5/5 xoxo

Samantha

Wow this is amazing!
cant belive that it is not rated a 5/5

you did a good job excellent..

keep it up!

This one very nice, I feel the emotios youve put into words..
very good indeed.