Wow,ummm..hmm..I dont know where to start,well this is the best poem I read yet on this site,I love the plot ,format and rhyme sceme,I feel that mabe if you broke this poem up into 4 lines each and then space,if will get more readers attetion,because poeple become overwelme when they see a huge blob of words and they usally stop or dont even read it,but great work im going check out your other work

Once again WOW
i love ur poemz. ur great.