Always a beautiful read, but i have no idea what it's about. lol. i don't think it's one of those poems made for other people, more like... the ones that mean soemthing to you....
well done anywayz.

Wow, what vivid imagery you have. All done with your words. It was very descriptive and easy to imagine. It's just really weird though, really bizzare similies and crazy things happening. I guess that's what dark poems are all about. Excellent job.

Wow! I was just blown away by this poem, great job. It had just a dark and scary feel to it and it rhymed flawlessly, the rhythm didnt seem forced at all, amasing job.

--Steph

Amazing! I was blown away buy your words. I simply loved the way you described everything. It was a great read. And I loved how each word planted an image inside my head. Very dark yet brilliant.

It flowed with ease and your use of vocabulary was great. I especially loved the lines:

"Shaking of the fire's ember,
As they fly into the stars,
Licking at the leafy green,
Egniting flaming scars,"

I've got to say, those lines stuck out the most for me. Very well done. Keep up the awesome work!

5/5

--Angie xoxo

Wonderful Job! Great imagery, excellent first stanza

First, I would like to note the simple mistakes that I have found in this poem:

"Egniting flaming scars,"

-Igniting*

"Bird hollors in the space,"

-Hollers*

"Trampeling hooves pack the soil,"

-Trampling*

Other than that, I liked this poem. It is well-worthy of a 5/5. Keep up the great work. You have great potential. My favorite stanza was:

"A murmur from the quaking hills,
That bleeds through every crack,
Thundering from clouded tops,
To the surface where we lack,"

~BJ~

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Very good. I really like this poem. It rhymes so well and everything just reads so smoothly. Nice!!!

A good poem overall. I liked your use of diction, the creative words strengthened the images and meaning I think.
In the first stanza, I thought the rhyming seemed a tad forced only because to me "...where we lack" is only half a line/sentance. It leaves me thinking, lacking what? This confused me.
In stanza five I lost the flow slightly and I can only put this down to the quick change in line length and meter.
I really enjoyed the ending, I found it a powerful and vivid finish.
Thanks for sharing.

Um, im not really sure what this poem is aboutbut it was good!! It must be on of those were only the writer understands it!! The rhyme was good and the flow was okay!! overall nice poem!!! 5/5!! Keep it up!!

Wow...this is really good...i loved...the details were awesome...a really spectacular poem...5/5.

Crippled demolishing scenes,
With babies wrapped in blood,
A new morn is not to bring,
For more tears are yet to flood.
[LOVED that part. It was such a great ending to the poem aswell!!]
You've done a really great job on this. I loved it. Your choice of wording was fantastic. Keep it up!! 5/5

`Taleee. xx.

Wow-that is so deep- It is such a beautifully chilling read--- You did an amazing job with word choice and the flow is on target-5/5 Keep it up-

This is a good poem i liked it alot. Oh and im adding you 2 my favourites.
~Kyra~

I Loved Your Choice Of Vocab And The Way This Poem Flowed So Flawlessly...It Was No Less Than Perfect...I Loved It! 5/5 xoxo-Nikki-xoox

Excellent poem, you came first in my contest with this poem. Just submitted results. I loved it.

I love it, all of your poems seem to be in the dark section. And, in my opinion, that is quite alright because you seem to excel in that topic very well! However, I did find one spelling mistake that I was sure of. Egniting = Igniting. 5/5 =]

-Jenna.

GREAT JOB!! this poem was fantastic. uhm im from the contest you entered. and you won 3rd place. for the truth about heaven so im just giving you your award. great job by the way. this poem was amazing i love it