Um well some choice words I admit but not too great. Something was lacking near the middle. The beginning really captured attention then it began to kinda mess up in the middle which doesn't flow as smoothly. Then the end...repeating broken kinda makes it sound slightly weird. So it's a good first and shows promises of talent.
~Faith-less

I thought it was a good poem. keep writing.

Aw that was a good poem :)

Well done i liked this small but effective lines welldone xxx alex xxx

I love this poem. And i think you know why!

This has alot of meaning to it. It is very good. Keep it up!~ericamayb~

Nice!!!!

Wow....this was a beatiful poem...so many promises..life is like that...but great poem!

I like this poem too your good

That was good hottie

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