by Heather Jul 15, 2006
category :
Sadness, depression /
grieving, loss
You try to hide the truth from me. |
by Allison
I liked it....it sounded like it could have been a song. The only thing that I didn't like is that, I think, it could have been more organized. *4/5* |
by Rosie
Very good poem hun, my friends mother is dieing at the moment and she too is scared of a phone call..or scared of coming home. Hold your chin up high darling and think positive xxxxxxx Rosie xXx |
by Tara Kay
It was very sad, i like how you dont try to rhyme your poems, you just let it all flow from inside, it is really well written |
Some nice repetition. Not really strong in the wording but it's cool. Emotion usage was great. The way it seemed sounded really heartfelt and really touching. Nice job on that. Content great but still it's the words that kinda brought this down. Nice job because it reaches out on the emotional plain quite. |
This is a very well written peice, though at first I was unsure as to the meaning of its content it quickly came together into a strong clear peice. the repetition works very well and your expressions are shown well. I am sorry for what you are going through. this peice is fantastically written |