"I give thee my life
I inherit you this;
All I've accomplished
And all that I wish."

This and the last stanzas were amasing, you've really got talent and I loved reading this, it's so inspirational, great work.

--Steph

Wow I have no words except WOW...lol WOW WOW WOW you should be proud and its obvious the lord talks through his people...because this is great !! best poem I've ever read..by far...10/5

God Bless

-Chris

Learn to live with reality; no god can ease the pain of the truth.

Some nice word play. The short lines really made this pull it off. So this was really cool. Enjoyed this because. Well not sure why except that it had this really pretty innocence *laugh* about it. But I don't know how to descibe it any better.
~Faith-less

The third stanza seemed to be a bit forced, but the rest was amazing. I'm a bit iffy on this subject, but it really made me want to believe. An excellent job!

xDarkSuicidex 5.5

I loved this poem!!! At church we took a spiritual gifts test and I was given the "Evangelistic gift" which is I'm unafraid to spread the news of Jesus and minister to others...its clear that you have that as well....Don't just write it in a poem and not go out and witness now...the world needs it and its great to see I'm not the only one who wants to!! 5/5

P.S would love your feedback on "The green candle in the window"

I really loved this one. The message is so simple yet so powerfull.

The lord whispered softly
But I clearly heard
And now I'm protected,
And I spread his word

I adore this stanza I think it is just so sweet and joyful.
The whole thing is a delight.

Sarah --
You did a beautiful job on this, honey. The rhyming didn`t seem forced at all, and neither did the flow. The spelling and grammar are perfect. =D I`m not sure really what else to say, except, 5/5. Keep this up.

Love Much,
Samantha Hollywood

This one is another one of your great poems that I have read! You are a talented writer and i hope to read more of your work! 5/5

Very good. the stanzas are great and rhyming. I like the whole idea and meaning of the poem. good job..

"Raise my fallen chin
And hold it up high
Give me the courage
That you hold inside."

^very beautiful stanza, something that I can relate to. I can just feel the Lord's finger underneath my chin, raising it so that I can look into His eyes to be reassured of His love. I am truly grateful that God gave you this poem to write and for you to share it with me!!

My only critique would be:

"And now I'm protected,
And I spread his word"

^I'd turn the second 'and' into an 'as' so it goes "And now I'm protected
As I spread His word"
And to capitalize all references to God such as the "Yous" and "Hims" kinda thing, if you know what I mean lol.
But other than that, perfect poem. Flowed very good and beautiful descriptions.

Much Love and God Bless,
Sarah-Joy