Comments : I will not give up

  • 16 years ago

    by Mat

    I feel the same way i wrote on some what the same...no where as good as yours but i like how you talk about all the bad things and how your a better person out of it...its inspiring(sp)

  • 16 years ago

    by you will never forget me

    Great emotions..i absolutely love this. =]

  • 16 years ago

    by Therisa

    The rhythm was good and it flowed together well, and it rhymed wonderfully.

  • 16 years ago

    by J4Y

    Aww this is rele good poem!
    keep up the good work x

  • 16 years ago

    by NoUr

    Way to go gurl..really a very very nice,inspiring poem..

  • 16 years ago

    by jordan

    Very nice poem ...
    21 years old yeah???
    but still young with a very good mind...!

  • 15 years ago

    by Angel Tears

    "Yes you killed me inside
    But I wont die"

    - This part in particular captured and kept my attention throughout the entire poem. I feel the same way about someone in particular.

    "Yes you tore me apart
    But I'm still in one piece"

    - This is portrayed to perfection.

    "Yes you took my dreams
    But I wont give up hope
    Yes you tortured me
    But I will cope"

    - This stanza literally brought me to tears.

    "Yes you made me sick
    But I'll live through this"

    - Excellent line.

    Overall, I love this piece. It describes things perfectly and actually gave me a bit of hope to move forward with. Please keep writing! :)