I liked it, great imagery, nice flow, sort of fades out in the end dont know if I liked that or not, The lack of capitals was good sort of made the reading easier and didnt demand a set rythym when you read it. Great job as always maybe use some other word for sun......if one exsists.....I dont think it does, but it would be good to see a synonym for it if it does.

I recently bought myself some books of poetry at the bookstore... Sandra Cisneros, Federico Garcia Lorca, and Sylvia Plath. I enjoy reading your work as much as I enjoy reading any of those, and I don't even have to pay for this! You should try making money off of this someday, if you haven't already.

Hm. Very good write. Thought it was quite lovely. Keep it up =]. 5.

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