I found a mistake in your last stanza on the last line.

"Only than may we not always lose "
then*

Other than that, it was a really great poem. My favorite stanza was:

"Moving words out without a thought
to the hatred that may aim at me
Only describing the tears in my heart
to reveal my locked up honesty"

I also loved the rhyme scheme you used. abab is my favorite type of poem, mainly because it's one of the hardest. You did a really great job! Keep up the work!! 5/5 :)

Wow, I thought this was a great poem. I didn't really find anything other than what the first person pointed out. It was a well written poem, and there were some parts where it was sad. So this poem definitely falls under this category. Very nicely done, a poem well thought out.

I like it. I love some of the metaphors you've used. This one:

"A solid wall engulfing all sensations"

Being my favourite one.

A great piece. I can't fault it. x

Good choice of words and metaphors... I like the way you worded the poem, gives it the depth it deserves. I think Sad poem is definitely the right place for this, other then that... maybe poems about life. Good write. 5/5

I'm disappointed at the rating..it should be all 5's.
but i guess thats just my view.
im adding you to my favs.
it was a spectacular poem
~Emah
5/5

Great poem!!! I liked the metaphors as well!! I was also dissapointed at the raiting like Wings Of Flames has said! Nice poem!! 5/5!!

"Moving words out without a thought
to the hatred that may aim at me
Only describing the tears in my heart
to reveal my locked up honesty"

I LOVED this stanza. This was an amasing poem, it flowed very well and had a great theme to it. I think you placed it in the right place, great work.

--Steph

This is a great poem I really liked it, The metaphores were awsome, amd your Rhyming was Fantastin, perfect poem. Great job 5/5

Beautiful. Simply breath-taking. This poem was very well written. I loved it from beginning to end. Great use of vocab. I loved the way it brought an image to my head. I especially loved the lines:

"A solid wall engulfing all sensations
from the life inside the soaring light
Dripping black tears of revelations
only seeing the pain and the blight"

Every word was flawless. I liked the metaphors you used. Keep writing, you've got talent m'dear.

Take Care.

--Angie xoxo

I really like this. Especially the way that you ended it. The rhyme scheme you had worked well and didn't seem forced. Great job on this. 5/5 Keep it up!

Anoher freaking awesome one Noni! You totally rock a poetry and I always love reading your stuff. Wo.Ot!

Ravyn

Wow this was a great poem ..amazing job writing it you should read some of mine

I like this part:

Imagination overcome most reality
nothing ever stays for the same
We all dream of some vain fantasy
While reality brings us only shame

it's so true. reality is so mean. most of the time the only happy place is lala land. awesome poem;)

"The base of my life was the emotion hate
falling down a pit of utter despair
The tip of my tongue like a slithering snake
nothing but pure venom to share

Moving words out without a thought
to the hatred that may aim at me
Only describing the tears in my heart
to reveal my locked up honesty"

Pure Genious....You Used Words So Vividly To Describe Feelings, I Think That This Poem Was The Icing On The Cake To Your Talent...It Really Showed How Gifted You Are...I Enjoyed Reading It 5/5 xoxo-Nikki-xoxo

Wow this is really good.