Wow. very direct and to the point, also very raw. great flow
JL

I love the way u've used brackets to magnify your point, very well done. my favourite stanza:

"I've been stricken scared (Terrified)
Sufficating on breath pushed in me.
Worthless howling creature (Pinned)
Trapped alone inside a coma state."

^^ Great imagery, allows us to become part of ur poem.

Great job, 5/5. =D
Christie

I've been betrayed (Called Drama.)
Unprotected, unloved, dirty, broken.
Being told I was lying. (Slapped hard.)
Refused to shed tears and appear lost.

^^I loved that part. It was so raw and powerful.

I can't believe I hadn't read this yet. This was amazing aswell. Wow. I loved how you had those seperate parts in brackets. I thought that suited the poem really well. Very good vocab and flow aswell. Another well written piece. Keep it up. And smile. =) 5/5

Natalie``

Wow. Deep. Meaningful. I like the style, and I can imagine this being read in front of a crowd. Some parts being told in whispers, and some being said powerfully as a need to tell. I really liked this, and I think it has alot behind it.

Great another excellent poem! Your poetry is so very unique and different(I know I have already said that) but it is so cool! I love almost everything so far, I have to read it all twice just to reall and truely soak it up and understand it!

Great write,
-annmarie

Wow. The words you use make your feelings very clear. This has such power and anger. Again the use of brackets was wonderful and added an extra dimension to the whole thing. Absolutely brilliant. Can't fault it.

Not too bad. A strong poem with a nice message.. But something about it threw me off. I'm not sure what.

xDarkSuicidex 4.5

I really liked this poem it had such a strong emotional tie to it and very sad. However the brackets really kinda threw me off, and made it difficult to read. But all in all I think it was fairly good.

Wow that was amazing

I love the way youve put this poem togethor. It really flowed

Well Done

Sondos