This poem has a lot of emotion. It was amazing. The flow was awsome too. I loved it.
5/5

I always find it really difficult to keep within such a tight structure and still make sense and say waht i want to say, but u have done it brilliantly. well done, an excellent poem

-biscuit-

Wow... that's really good. the words sort of.... blend together perfctly... good job, honestly god job.

Ottava Rima is hard to pull off without sounding forced, and you acheived it! This poem was rather great, just the sheer emotion and power put into the piece made it great. Whoever can pull off an Ottava Rima deserves a ten out of five. Keep on penning!
~Dana

Wow, Natalie this was good!! I have never read a Ottava Rima so it was kinda fun for me to see a different style of poetry!! The rhyming and flow were good didnt seemed to be forced at all!! It was so full of emotion!!! I loved the 1st stanza

"Can you see me slowly fading away,
My presence drifting into the distance?
The tears I've cried no longer display,
The pain that I feel through all the silence.
My mouth is sewn shut so words cannot spray,
Of what is trapped inside of my conscience.
Would you rather have me slip down and fall,
Or should I never say goodbye at all?"

Excellent!!5/5!!

Yet again lovely poem. Amazing wording, flow along with rythym. I enjoyed it quiet abit.

Talee --
Wow, you did a great job on this. Definitely holds a lot of emotion ;; and I like ottava rima`s. =D. You did a terrific job, don`t change ANYTHiNG about it!! Great job, 5/5, keep it up.

Love Much,
Samantha Hollywood