A very sad poem. But for your first poem I thought you did a pretty good job on it. You could make it a little longer.. Dig deeper into your feelings. I thought the rhymes were good. Except for.. "Sitting there trying not to cry,
Wishing they could lie down and die" ..I just felt that rhyme seems to be used alot.. And I dunno. It was still a good poem though. Keep it up!! 5/5

`Taleee. xx.

Very good! I understand your words exactly for I go through it too.

xoxoxo Haley

''On the outside I may look alive,
But sometimes I feel as if I`m dead inside''

^^Those are my favorite lines. I can totally relate. Great write-Keep it up!